Comic Initial Development

The idea for this comic started sometime last year, before I was in uni. I have been sitting on this idea a long while and have given it a lot of thought. I had even drawn the first three pages I had originally thought would be the beginning. 

The colours were not what I was aiming for and the I needed more practice drawing the characters. I would like later on to sculpt my characters out in chavant clay to help  me get a better 3d understanding of what they would look like in different scenarios, different angles and different lighting.

Below are the very first thumbnails of my first chapter of the comic. It is meant to be a mature comic for adult readers but I still think that this is overkill. I was going for that horror movie damsel in skimpy clothes getting in trouble. like Scream? Yeah, it didn't pan out. Not the look I want.